what grade would you give my paper and state reasons as to why?

the purpose of this research paper is to talk a bout a specific treatment model or approach and specify a certain populatio which i chose college students and how does the treatment help them go into a medical approach since this is a chemical dependency course for my major of forensic psychology

Running head: MOTIVATIONAL INTERVIEWING TREATMENT ON COLLEGE BINGE DRINKING STUDENTS

Motivational Interviewing Treatment on College Binge Drinking Students
John Jay College of criminal justice

Psychology 268 – Section 01
Instructor: Prof. Gregory I. Mack, Ph.D.
December 22, 2008

College students binge drink for many reasons, which results in long-term health risks. Many college students binge drink in order to fit in with fraternity, sororities members, and/or dormitories that sometimes insists on having young college students to drink especially lots of types of alcoholic drinks. College students drink a variety of alcoholic beverages from light to heavy alcoholic beverages that increase health risks and psychological health risks such as heart diseases and brain abnormalities. Treatments such as motivational interviewing can help lessen the consumption of alcohol and allow the college students who binge drink to slowly recover from this disease they have developed of binge drinking. Means comparisons indicated that both groups showed reductions in alcohol-related problems, however, only the Motivational Interviewing sample evidenced significant reductions in binge drinking (Feldstein, S., & Forcehimes, A., 2007). Misuse of alcohol can lead to a wide range of consequences, the most severe being alcohol abuse, dependence, and death (Devos-Comby, L. & Lange, J., 2008). The median number of drinks in a row that a college man or women must have to be called a binge drinker is 6 for a man and 5 for a woman (Wechsler, H., & Kuo, M. (2000).
Treatments such as motivational interviewing can benefit specifically college students who drink alcohol in sororities or fraternities that, binge drink. Motivational interviewing is a style of counseling that can be used throughout the therapeutic process (Jarvis, Tebbutt, Mattick & Shand, p.45). Since college students struggle with changing their habits and making a decision to change motivational drinking is a good technique in helping them with that problem. Binge drinking is a common problem that many college students are facing throughout their college lives. There are many alcoholic specific treatments that offer a wide range of help to allow those who suffer from binge drinking to be able to recovery from the alcoholic abuse. Yet, motivational interviewing can be used to begin the process of thinking about changing their ways on drinking (Jarvis, Tebbutt, Mattick & Shand, p.45). Motivational interviewing will allow oneself to make his or her own choices in deciding to stop excessive drinking patterns and set a plan to change the alcoholic behavior.
There are a couple of successful ways in which binge drinking can be helped. Findings show that more education and provision of coping skills training during treatment may influence self-efficacy by increasing the coping resources of a patient with SUD (McKellar, Ilgen & Moos, 2008).
The present findings suggest that individuals who report the greatest initial improvements in alcohol-related problems and impulsivity may have difficulty maintaining a high level of self-efficacy (McKellar, Ilgen & Moos, 2008). One brief intervention, motivational interviewing (MI) has shown efficacy in reducing alcohol-related problems in college samples (Feldstein, S., & Forcehimes, A., 2007). When compared with MI, other interventions have also reduced student drinking, necessitating the inclusion of a control condition when evaluating
MI (Feldstein, S., & Forcehimes, A., 2007). While participants reported feeling increased discrepancy from their peers and increased desire to reduce drinking, no behavior change emerged (Feldstein, S., & Forcehimes, A., 2007).

Alcohol students encounter binge drinking due to a form of social entertainment with other college students. Alcohol is the main factor in which students have no control since the process to reduce alcohol consumption is a difficult process. Some types of treatments to consider for alcoholic students are detoxification. Also college students have a hard time in understanding themselves.
There are many factors that contribute to alcohol such as society, pressure, and stress. As a college student, alcohol is a way to release the negativity of life and just use alcohol as a mean to numb the pain one goes through. In order to understand what treatment is best for oneself several steps should be considered to see which treatment is best for one. Consideration of selection and socialization effects is central to understanding how substance use relates to fraternity, and sorority membership (McCabe, Schulenberg, Johnston, O’Malle
poaky oak leave me alone geez im tryin to get other ppl besides you to help.!!!! ur only giving me technical terms im really in need of more than just ur opinions on my paper and more of this and that responses!!!! ugh stop stalking me it’ s getting creepy!!!! :)

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3 Responses to “what grade would you give my paper and state reasons as to why?”

  1. Mitch R Says:

    Fail-

    Because you’re a woman

  2. i_am_an_english_teacher Says:

    A C if I was feeling generous. You have very poor grammar skills and your spelling and sentence structure is wacky.
    If I was a tutor and you were sitting with me, I would have you read the paper backwards, one sentence at a time, to see if it made sense.
    Go back and reread, write, and take your time. It seems like you either rushed through or didn’t edit or revise.

  3. PokeyOaks Says:

    Ganicity…

    I’ve shown you in the first question when you asked regarding this essay what was wrong, and I showed you plenty of examples of what you need to change.

    As I_am_an_english_teacher said, I would still give you around a C.

    There’s way too much citation, and it’s nowhere near spread out enough that it looks like you even wrote much. I dabbled in medical applications in forensic sciences before I began medical school, so since this is forensic psychology and it’s your major, it’d get a terrible grade because you don’t define certain methods, it lacks sustenance as someone can easily refute the sorority or fraternity stereotype for one example, and the grammatical errors and essay structure easily confuses readers. Where are the numbers coming from? What type of studies are being done? Why are these numbers the way they are? Why would certain methods work? Why is a control not needed in a study when evaluating motivational interviewing? What specific examples lead particular students to drink? What demographic generally drinks and when asked, why do they usually drink? Don’t stick a citation in there to glue it together if there isn’t any real preface or data to support the essay. Specify, support, and engage readers on the topic. Pump it up by cleaning it up and make it stronger with more supporting facts, including actual numbers and where/why these numbers are, and editing out weakening statements such as, “Some types of treatments to consider for alcoholic students are detoxification.” <– Detox is only 1 treatment, but there are many ways, so you’d have to specify what exactly detox is, what methods they utilize, and why it results in a high success rate.

    Please, refer to the corrections I first gave you in one of your questions. Not all college students even like alcohol, and consideration of how fraternities and sororities select and it’s social effects is NOT central to understanding how substance use relates as not ALL sororities and fraternities do such acts.

    “Yet, motivational interviewing can be used to begin the process of thinking about changing their ways on drinking” <— HOW?! Does it make them want more to the point they kill themselves and thus can no longer drink anymore or does it resolve standing issues that CAUSE them to drink in the first place? Specify, PLEASE! =(

    I’ll leave you with this, as I hope maybe I’ve explained myself a little bit better.

    I want to see this essay turn out for you, and you have said you do well in other classes I believe; so, as a medical student and someone who absolutely dislikes research papers that say there’s a fix but doesn’t show how or why, I’d give you a C or a C-. Good luck!